Despite a variety of sport facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays many
people
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are not in a perfect physical
sittuion
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situation
due to
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using technology and
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in their houses more than before. There are so many things in individuals modern
life
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that are causing
this
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problem and we are going to talk about them in
this
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essay. In my opinion, the most important thing
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effecting
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affecting
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peoples
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people's
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health
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is that most of them have lots of things to do and almost nobody has enough time to exercise and do some
health
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care
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.
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they should do a lot to keep their job safe and make enough money for their families.
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hand
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many jobs are online and
in house
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jobs in modern society,
this
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means that
people
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are living their
life
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behind a computer screen and
siting
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sitting
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in a chair
for
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all day can cause many
health
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problems,
such
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as getting fat or getting backaches or different
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illnesses
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. But there are many ways to solve
this
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problem,
at
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the first place
indivisuals shoud
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individuals should
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about their
their
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own mental and physical
health
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,
for
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example
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they can eat healthy foods
such
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as vegetables and milk and they
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can make
a
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time for exercising in their
day
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life
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.
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,
govermants
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governments
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should
also
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care
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about their
citizens
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citizen's
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health
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, they can try to make television shows about
selfcare
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self-care
self care
and start building gyms in every city, they
also
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can sell cheap healthy foods in the restaurants and markets to make
people
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eat good food. It is true that
people
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are less
fir
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fit
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nowadays than before and
its
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it's
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because of the busy
life
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that they have and because of the usage of technology
such
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as websites and applications and different games. But they can solve
this
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problem if they
realy
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really
care
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about their future
life
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, it is
realy
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really
important to have a healthy
life
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and exercise enough to stay fresh.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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