Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and giver your own opinion.
Many individuals argue that huge, magnificent structures are crucial for a
city
. Some Use synonyms
people
think that the Use synonyms
money
ought to be spent on enhancing schools and Use synonyms
hospitals
. I have some opinions about Use synonyms
this
topic and I will elaborate on it in Linking Words
this
essay.
Nowadays, numerous folks go to travel overseas and visit popular places. Linking Words
As a result
, the Linking Words
city
can get a lot of Use synonyms
money
, which is good for their communities. Use synonyms
For example
, in South Linking Words
Korea
, there is a Use synonyms
city
named Seoul, which is the capital Use synonyms
city
of South Use synonyms
Korea
. In Seoul, there are many popular places Use synonyms
such
as The Lotte Tower, traditional buildings and local markets. Plenty of tourists go to those places and spend Linking Words
money
, which leads to making the Use synonyms
city
better Use synonyms
as well as
their citizen's living qualities. Linking Words
For
Linking Words
this
reason, large, impressive buildings are essential for a Linking Words
city
and Use synonyms
citizens
.
Correct pronoun usage
its citizens
Although
I partially agree with Linking Words
this
, the Linking Words
money
should be spent on improving Use synonyms
hospitals
. These days, our young population rate is declining but older Use synonyms
people
's population rate is getting higher. Use synonyms
Moreover
, many Linking Words
people
move to the big cities so that in the rural areas, only aged communities remain. Use synonyms
For instance
, in South Linking Words
Korea
, young generations do not want to marry and Use synonyms
Linking Words
also
they do not Rephrase
apply
want
have a child. Add the particle
want to
Consequently
, older Linking Words
people
are increasing more than youngsters so we must spend on Use synonyms
money
Use synonyms
build
Wrong verb form
building
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
hospitals
a hospital
hospitals
. If a lack of Use synonyms
hospitals
, aged folks can die easily because average old Use synonyms
people
have various chronic diseases. Of course, Use synonyms
this
phenomenon is not just in South Linking Words
Korea
and it depends on Use synonyms
counties
situation.
In conclusion, I think that both views are relevant. Replace the word
the country's
while
huge, impressive buildings are very important for a Linking Words
city
and that will be good for their citizens and we should build more Use synonyms
hospitals
for aged Use synonyms
people
which leads to our society becoming more harmonious.Use synonyms
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