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Some people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

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Migration from a
devloping
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developing
country
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 to a
devloped
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developed
country
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 is inevitable
nowdays
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. It is sad but true that qualified and
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experienced
people
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 are moving overseas to
work
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 in their respective
field
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fields
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. I think
people
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 doing
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 for
better
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a better
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 lifestyle and employment
however
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this
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 scenario
cause
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causes
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a
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apply
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various
problems
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to
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nation
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a nation
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such
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shortage
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a shortage
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 of workers and
financial
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a financial
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 crisis.
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 the reasons and effects of
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 situation. To commence with , There are a plethora of reasons for moving abroad. First and foremost is better career options.
People
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 are moving
to
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overseas because of the employment options
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developed
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country
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countries
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 provide to individuals as they easily find field jobs in
foriegn
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foreign
 rather
in
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 their mother
country
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.
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, studies
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 that
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 applied for
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work
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a work
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 visa
for
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 Canada and
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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last
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 year.
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, another significant reason is higher salary.
Devloped
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Developed
 nation gives high
salary
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salaries
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 to skilled workers. To illustrate, Doctors and engineers are getting double
income
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their income
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in
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abroad as compared to
home
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their home
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country
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.
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 they can get
better
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a better
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 lifestyle
as well as
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best
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 infrastructure but it creates
problems
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 for
home
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country
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.
This
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 situation of moving to
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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 for
work
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 causes numerous
problems
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.
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 with, mother
county
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country
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face
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faces
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the
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 shortage of
proffesionals
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professionals
 as all the skilled
people
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 move. To clear that, hospitals and in other
indusrties
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industries
 there will be not enough experienced staff .
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,
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country's
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 economy will decrease. Brain drain is another problem as our highly qualified
people
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 will
work
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 for international companies.
T
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 exemplify, most of the scientist who
work
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in
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 NASA is from
india
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India
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. To summarise, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above , some
people
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 with good educational background and
relateable
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relatable
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 experience are settling in overseas for
work
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 as they get
good
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the good
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 opportunity but it creates huge
problems
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however
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i
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 think the government can give better salary to skilled
people
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 can stop them to going
to
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abroad.

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