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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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A lot of
people
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 feel the best way to stay in shape is to regularly go to the
gym
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 others think there are more effective methods.
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 I would admit that the health benefits of gyms are self-evident, the best way to stay fit over the
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 is to join a sport or similar activity. Those who swear by gyms often show the vast
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the
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benefits of working out.
People
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 going to the
gym
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 can be divided into those doing exercise and weight-lifting. Cardio workouts have been proven in various studies to
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strengthen
 the heart muscles and reduce
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 of many diseases. Weight-lifting is
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 a scientifically supported method of combating bone density deterioration and improving muscular health. No reasonable person would doubt both the vast anecdotal and scientific support for regular trips to the
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. Despite the advantages, it is far more motivating to take part in other sports
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. Signing up for a
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 membership is a notoriously fickle commitment. Most
people
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 go for a few months and give up, never to return again. Contrast that with participation in sports and other
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. Someone who picks up tennis or football is much more likely to play regularly for a large portion of their life, possibly deep into old age. Even
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 like Yoga and Tai Chi are more likely to become lifelong habits and
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 have a greater
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 impact on fitness levels.
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, going to the
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 has great benefits but it is not motivating enough to become habitual.
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,
people
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 should experiment with a wide range of
activities
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 in the hopes that they can develop a lifelong passion for one of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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