You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir, Madam I am writing

this

letter to express my interest in the advertisement you published in the Australian magazine on the 22nd of May about taking care of a six-year-old baby and staying with their family for six months. I would like to apply for

this

job. Since I have seen

this

, I have been so glad eventually, I found an opportunity to get practical experience in nursing the outside my country.

Moreover

This

is an immense chance to learn about foreign cultures and behaviours. Not only It may help to improve my English knowledge But

also

my Communication skills I would like to inform you about my qualifications and skills which I have. I think I am a perfect candidate for

this

vacancy. I have done my Bachelor's in Nursing degree and have vast experience of about 3 years in

this

field.

Furthermore

, I worked as a paediatric nurse for the

last

2 years.

In addition

this

, I have completed a course in neonatal life support which will support any emergency situation.

Therefore

, I know how to handle the babies in the correct ways. If I get

this

occupation, I would love to do a diploma in nursing or any subject

along with

Besides

this

, I strive to explore

the

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nature which may help to refresh my mind. Hopefully, I will receive positive feedback and I am attaching my CV. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, shaini.

Submitted by shainikellapatha on Sun Sep 03 2023

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