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Every year several languanges die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in ther world.

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The variety of several
languages
 has become extinct in human civilizations. Some societies assume that having fewer
languages
 will make their lives more convenient to communicate in today's world. I believe that knowing and understanding more than other
languages
 will have a positive impact on the lives and the tourism sector. I disagree with the statement made above with the several points made below. On the
one
 hand,
languages
 play an important role in the country's communication and interaction with each other. Those
people
 who know more than
one
language
 are categorized as more intelligent.
Therefore
, learning a new
language
 takes time, effort and creativity.
Furthermore
, today's world contains a lot of communities that have their own culture or
people
 in the way they are custom to their culture because they are born in touch with their mother tongue so they can express themselves more easily but if they are forced to speak other
languages
 they may not show their feelings. To exemplify it, a study in India shows that when choosing another common
language
 English about 70% of
people
 prefer to speak in Persian because they are more familiar with and better understanding of it.
On the other hand
,
language
 has a positive impact on tourism. Most tourists choose their destination in a way that they want to see their culture, civilizations and
languages
.
For instance
, speaking in Japanese is the
one
 reason to visit Japan and if the
language
 dies out
then
 the country is not attractive anymore to the tourists.
In addition
, knowing more than
one
language
 will increase trade between countries. It will grow our business at the international level. In conclusion, vanishing the
language
 will have negative effects on the country because
people
 do not contact each other to communicate and countries are not interesting to visitors.
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