It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
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, different kinds of investing money in our lives, by buying goods or large investments in banks. New opportunities are experienced by people who seek to take risks ,even Without the risk-taking gift that has been given to us by nature, humanity couldn’t achieve what they have achieved until today.
Despite the fact that there are many privileges, there are negative sides to it too. Too much risky decision-making can lead to become
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In conclusion, risky decision-making is an inseparable part of our life, it is even a cognitive executive function of our brain, However
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