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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by cards or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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Payment methods are increasing
day
 by
day
thus
 most modern
people
 like to purchase via
cards
 or online payment mode because it is not only safe but
also
 hassle-free. In the following ,essay I will elucidate my point of view in support of online or via-card payment methods.
To begin
 with, technology is getting better, smarter and more modern
day
 by
day
 so that,
people
 of
this
 modern era go with the flow of modernism and prefer to shop via
cards
 or other smarter technology
for instance
, if someone wants to buy something expensive
then
 he or she has to carry a lot of
cash
that is
 not safe to bring in crowded markets so
people
 finds it more convenient to pay with
cards
 or online rather than
cash
.
On the contrary
, some
people
 still prefer to pay with
cash
 because they think
this
 will let them connect emotionally with the thing they bought in
this
 way they give their hard-earned money with their hands in the form of
cash
 and
this
 will give them mental pleasure and satisfaction
additionally
, it is not even that bad to carry some
cash
 but obviously paying with the
cards
 and online is safer and convenient.
To sum up
, I personally prefer to pay with
cards
 or with any other modern developed mode rather than
cash
 because I find it easier and suitable for me and I recommend
this
 as well because nowadays, it is the need of the hour to appreciate betterment in our society.
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