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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by cards or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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Payment methods are increasing
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 most modern
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 like to purchase via
cards
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 or online payment mode because it is not only safe but
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 hassle-free. In the following ,essay I will elucidate my point of view in support of online or via-card payment methods.
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 with, technology is getting better, smarter and more modern
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 by
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 so that,
people
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 of
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 modern era go with the flow of modernism and prefer to shop via
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 or other smarter technology
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, if someone wants to buy something expensive
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 he or she has to carry a lot of
cash
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 not safe to bring in crowded markets so
people
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 finds it more convenient to pay with
cards
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 or online rather than
cash
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.
On the contrary
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, some
people
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 still prefer to pay with
cash
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 because they think
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 will let them connect emotionally with the thing they bought in
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 way they give their hard-earned money with their hands in the form of
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 and
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 will give them mental pleasure and satisfaction
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, it is not even that bad to carry some
cash
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 but obviously paying with the
cards
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 and online is safer and convenient.
To sum up
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, I personally prefer to pay with
cards
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 or with any other modern developed mode rather than
cash
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 because I find it easier and suitable for me and I recommend
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 as well because nowadays, it is the need of the hour to appreciate betterment in our society.
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