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In some countries، owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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We should not provide universal basic income because it will make the
government
 poor. The
government
 needs to spend a lot to fight with economic downturn, unemployment and social injustice. So we need to save money for necessities, not for poverty.
According to
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research, introducing the provision of universal basic income will lead to an economic crisis which will take around 100 years to recover. More,
this
 policy will make inflation inevitable. In some ,instances the
government
 can provide relief in case of natural disasters. The fact that people need
government
 funding in
this
 case is not the same as universal basic income.
This
 does not contradict the principle of the free market. Another point is that no one should be given free money if they are lazy. I know poor people are all lazy because I was like that. But I pushed myself through education and got a degree a job a house a very great family. I was so very proud
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that I was not in poverty anymore. If I can do it, you can do it too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural significance
  • financial investment
  • appreciation
  • legacy
  • privacy
  • customization
  • social status
  • sense of security
  • government incentives
  • tax deductions
  • community ties
  • economic growth
  • financial strain
  • mortgage commitments
  • property taxes
  • mobility
  • rite of passage
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