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The pie charts below give date on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give date on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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The information provided in the pie charts depicts the proportion of the usage of some basic necessities by different
nations
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 and how the masses of all
states
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 are scattered all over the globe.
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, the pie charts illustrate in what proportion different
nations
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 use the basic essentials,
whereas
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 they
also
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 depict in what ratio these
states
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 spend on the necessities.
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, more than half of the world's
states
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 are in Asia, which is almost 57% of the global masses,
nevertheless
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, 43% consists of other
nations
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, which covers all other continents.
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, it is noticeable from the pie charts that
nations
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 like the United
States
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 and Europe consume a large part of the natural resources,
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, other
nations
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 use almost 40% of the basic necessities of life, which is a minuscule ratio compared to America and European
nations
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. Considering the statistics of the world spending, the data indicates that the world spends 24% on food, 6% on clothing, and 12% are residential expenditures,
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, transport and others are 18% and 40%.
To sum up
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, the US and EU countries have the highest ratio in terms of usage,
while
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 other
nations
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 have the lowest, which is about 40%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nations, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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