Task 2: Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, fashion has played a critical part in our daily life, each different
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outfits
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will be suitable for
variety
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of vacations.
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a number of notions believe it is crucial for workers to
dress
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suitable
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at the offices, other views think that the manager of the
company
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should pay more attention
on
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the work rather than how the employees look. In my opinion, I strongly prefer the former
than
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the latter.
Firstly
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, fashion and
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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are
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not
just
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only
represented
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the outside look, they
also
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show the owners’ personalities. For many people, it seems to be a waste of time and money to spend on clothes, they all have the similar thought that they should spend their budget on more necessary facilities.
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might be the biggest mistake because their outside appearances will much
likely
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to
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affect the way society
treating
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them.
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, during an interview, between a person who prepared their
outfits
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carefully and a person who
do
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not show any taste of fashion, the managers mostly will choose the first guy. It is not
how
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whether
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your
dress
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cost
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a great amount of money or not, but the important thing is you must have a tidy and perfect outfit for the right vacation. Viewed on different sides,
a nice
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nice outfits
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outfits
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will not help the owners become more efficient at work. Despite the fact that how employees
dress
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are
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mainly important, the development of the
company
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should be a priority.
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, if a particular
company
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giving
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gives
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too much attention
on
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to
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the
worker
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worker'
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outfits
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,
while
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completely
forget
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forgetting
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about improving their
company
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,
this
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might soon
will
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lead to
a
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bankrupt
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. On second thought,
required
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requiring
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the employee to
dress
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suitable
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in suitable
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clothes is a way to show their respect to the customers. It
also
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helps the
company
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look more professional and polite. In conclusion,
although
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the
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effective workers will develop the
company
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rapidly,
it
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they
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should be more considered
on
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apply
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workers’
outfits
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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