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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table
revealse
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reveals
 data about the
percentage
 of national
consumerexpenditure
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consumer expenditure
 by category in 5 different countries ( Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey) in 2002.
Overall
, Turkey had the most
expenditure
 consumers in the
case
 of
food
/ drink and
tobbaco
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tobacco
 and
also
leisure
/education,
while
 Italy had the most consumption in the
case
 of clothing/footwear.
On the other hand
, Sweden had the
least
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lowest
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 proportion of
food
 and clothes
expenditure
,
while
 in the
case
 of
clothing
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,clothing
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 the least
was belonged
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belonged
has belonged
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 to Spain. Turkey was the biggest consumer of the
food
/ drink and
tobbaco
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tobacco
 industry and
leisure
/education with 32.14% and 4.35%,
while
 Italian citizens had the
most
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highest
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percentage
 of
expenditure
 for clothing/footwear with 1.98%. Spanish people spent 18.8% of their
expenditure
 on
food
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the food
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 category,
while
this
 ratio was almost
one third
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one-third
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 and one
ninethfor
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ninth for
 the
clothe
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clothes
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 and
leisure
case
 with 6.51% and 1.98% respectively. In Sweden, citizens spend 15.77% of their money
in
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on
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food
/drink and tobacco,
whereas
this
percentage
 was 5.40 and 3.22 in two other
categorizes
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categories
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. Irish people had the second
percentage
 of
expenditure
 rate in the
case
 of
food
 after Turkish people, with 28.91%.
Additionally
, In
the
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Ireland, the least amount of money was spent
for
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on
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leisure
 with 2.21%.
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  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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