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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented multiple bar graph exemplifies the comparison data between the different
level
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levels
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 of age
group
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groups
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 residing in Iceland
within
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between
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 the
year
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years
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 1990 and 2020 at
interval
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 of 10 years. In summary, the inhabitants in adulthood are much higher than other citizens throughout the years meanwhile the population of teenagers shows
the
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 decreasing tendency during the years.

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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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