the graph below shows the annual visitor to new zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

the graph below shows the annual visitor to new zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
The line graph illustrates
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of travellers from the five distinct nations to
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new zealand
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New Zealand
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between the
year
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years
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1996 and 2014. The figures
represented
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are represented
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in
new zealand
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New Zealand
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dollars.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Australia
was
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held at first position for maximum expenditure and China was the lowest one among
rest
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the rest
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of the countries Japan,
UK
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the UK
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, and
USA
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the USA
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. In the period of 10 years from 1996 to 2006, the Australian visitors were at the peak of spending 2500
dollar
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dollars
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which was more than double from
USA
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the USA
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with 12000
dollar
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dollars
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.
However
,
at the end
of the time Australia suffered from dramatic change and
moderatelly
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moderately
decreased to an average of 2000, but still was at the top
from
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USA
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the USA
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with approximately 12000
dollar
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. On the other side, the total expenses
from
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Japan and
UK's
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UK
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tourists were
extancly
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exactly
same
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the same
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in the
begining
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beginning
with
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500
dollar
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but in
further
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the further
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stages of 2002,
2008
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and 2008
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they showed drastic
fluctutions
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in
opposite
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way
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with 1000$ and 200$, 900$ and 600$ respectively. Meanwhile, the money spent by
chinese
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Chinese
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traverllers
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travellers
were nearly nill to 400
dollar
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dollars
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over the whole term.
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