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The internet has changed the way we intract with each other now compared to in the past. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#internet #intract
Nowadays, socialization
patterens
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patterns
 are unique from previous times
due to
 internet connection. It brings immense
benifits
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benefits
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education
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 sector through online studies, but
in contrast
 student
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 their exposure
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 the surrounding areas as they does not feel required to go outside. The foremost advantage of
internet
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the internet
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 is all the study
material
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materials
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 are
accesable
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accessible
 on smart computers. The learners can
do face to face
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have face-to-face
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 conversations with their tutors regarding
studies
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their studies
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. Even the children from rural areas who are struggling with transport
facilties
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facilities
 can gain education with the internet resources.
For instance
, the
lastest
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 report for
developing
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the developing
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 country India says that approximately 90
percent
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 of
young
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 generation was able to complete their graduation courses through online studies
in
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 the time of
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pandemic
 covid 19.
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,
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traits like personal development and social skills
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suffered
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 if one can spend most of the time in online attraction.
However
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 people
does
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 not feel the need to go out and explore
the
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new places. It will directly affect
on
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their
self confidence
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 and communication skills
,
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 because without playing in groups or spending time with family and friends, the person only
get
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 limited and
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 on
others
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others'
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 experiences.
Though
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, one can not spend his whole life in front of
mobile
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a mobile
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 and
laptops
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 because
real life
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 experiences are more amazing than
vedios
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videos
.
To conclude
, the accessible knowledge from distinct parts of
world
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the world
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 is one of the astonishing
way
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ways
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 of
interaction
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 towards society but the exploration
in
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 the real world with unique possessions and nature can only be experienced
by
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 physical
involvment
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involvement
.
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