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Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summerise in 150 words

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The given line graph illustrates the
percentage
 of the
population
 of several nations in Asia from the past to the future between 1970 to 2040.
Overall
, there are 4 countries involved in the graph, including the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. At first glance,
it is clear that
 people who lived in the Philippines presented the largest proportion of
total
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population
 in 1970
while
 the smallest
population
 was in Indonesia.
However
, Malaysia will have the highest
percentage
 of
population
 in 2040, and
then
 Indonesia, the Philippines and Thailand, in sequence.
As a result
, there has been a significant increase in the
percentage
 of the residing
population
 in all four countries, it
also
 noticeable that
besides
 the Philippines’
population
fell
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 markedly
around
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 5% from 1990 to 2010, other periods of these four nations were climbed gradually and
also
 be predicted to reach to above 45 percentages.
Moreover
, Malaysia will lead the
most
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 proportion at 80%,
in contrast
, the
percentage
 of
population
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 in Thailand will only rise to 45%.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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