The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.

The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.
The table depicts information about the proportion of apartments used in six hotels from May to September in five years from 1985 to 2000 with their figure of rating stars for all given hostels. After analysing the table it was clearly seen that the
hotel
Concorde and the Hamilton had five starts and both do have the same statistic of occupied rooms in 1985 and 1990.
Additionally
, both of these hotels declined their percentage in two later years(1995 and 2000).
Besides
, the
hotel
tower was the only one with four stars and had a similar percentile in the ages of 1990 and 2000.
Furthermore
,the
last
three
motel
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had 3 stars. Moving to
Hotel
Olivia the proportion in the former two years was 90 and 85, and in the latter two ,periods it was 89 and 95 respectively.
Moreover
,
Hotel
Hampton had the same
statistic
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for all ages except in the year 1995. At ,
last
the continental
hotel
had nearly 332 apartments collectively throughout the time period.
Overall
, the
hotels
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hotel's
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Hamilton and Hampton had the maximum percentage of rooms,
whereas
the resort's Tower and Concorde had a lower number.
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