Some people believe that if a child commits a crime, they should be punished while others think it is the child's parent who should be punished. DIscuss both views and give your opinion.

It must be recognized that punishing young offenders is a salient issue that needs to be addressed, others believe that it is their

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who should be punished for their

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's actions

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. It is the opinion of the writer that a child who commits

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should be harshly punished. It is essential to understand that

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who commit

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have to be punished for their, as it will prevent them from taking

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actions again. The biggest benefit of

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being punished is that it will

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act as a warning to the kids

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so that they would have to think about the consequences before they even do anything.

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, punishment should be applied

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all juvenile delinquents. Despite these, some people still believe that it is the parents who should be punished

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. They argued that

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are greatly influenced by their

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and irresponsible or abusive parents affect the kids in a negative way leading to young offenses.

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point does have credibility, but

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are not only influenced by their parents but

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learnt negative from the outside rather than from their family. The writer believes that communities should enforce laws on young offenders and find the appropriate to punish them so that they will not do the same things again and

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make them more responsible with their behaviours. Because of

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, rehabilitating them and

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rid of all aggression from their minds give them a better life.

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them develop a sense of responsibility and

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of behaviours are essential points that need to be considered.

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, the appropriate punishments should be imposed so that the

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become a better version of themselves.