the two pie charts illustrate how many online sales for retail sectors in Canada completed in the 2005 and in the 2010.
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were completed
the
2005 and Correct article usage
apply
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apply
the
2010.
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apply
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an
couldn’t
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and Appliance. Use synonyms
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graphic
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graphics
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leader with marvellous sales is Change the word
absolute
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Electronics
sector, Correct article usage
the Electronics
despite
these factors Food & Beverage Capitalize word
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have
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apply
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a 2
cents
difference.
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race
between Correct article usage
a race
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Furnishings
and Video Games, Use synonyms
great
start Correct article usage
a great
from
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for
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with Use synonyms
the
differenceCorrect article usage
a
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of 7
cents
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the outsider
outsider
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outsiders
eventually
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difficultly
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difficult
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Furnishings
, Use synonyms
unexpected
downgrade from 25% to 15%. Enormous anarchy for Correct article usage
an unexpected
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furnishings
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however
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“ piece
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a “ piece
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sales, they were most sustainable compared to each other. Food&Beverage represented Use synonyms
high
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a high
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