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The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the SAT
math
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 scores
categoried
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categorised
categorized
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 by sex between 1992 and 2000 in a specific school.
Overall
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, average SAT
math
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results
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 of both genders grew steadily during the 8-year
period
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.
In addition
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, the figures of
male
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males
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 are always higher than
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 of the opposite sex. The average SAT
math
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 points of
male
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males
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 started at 500 in 1992 and climbed with fluctuation to 510 in 1994. During the
period
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 from 1994 to 1998, the male test
results
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 experienced a surge from 510 to a peak of 535. The figures
then
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 remained constant at that level until the end of the reviewed
period
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 at only 460 points in 1992, the average SAT
math
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results
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 of
female
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females
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 increased significantly to above 510 in 1996,
reached
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reaching
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 the level of
male’s
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male
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 scores in
previous
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the previous
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 2 years.
Then
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, the
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 from 1996 to 2000 witnessed a soar to 530 points of the average SAT
math
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results
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 of
female
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females
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, which closed considerably the gap with the figures of
male
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males
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words math, results, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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