Female students are better than male students. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

It is a common belief that
school
boys
are not as got as
school
als. In my view, female
students
or better since they learn intently in all
subjects
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reasons prove
females
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students
are better is the
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disability
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follow
their plan.
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,
girls
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mature people faster than
boys
,
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they care what the wart
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prove
,
then
they Aseta qual and make a plan.
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, they understand the impact of education on
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and they focus on knowledge
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school
instead
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As a result
, female
students
in high schools where they know what Job they want and the path they choose, it means
girls
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before and they
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it for a long time,
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very good at some specific
subjects
.
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male
students
might develop skills
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subjects
which
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interested in, simultaneously in their instinctive
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logic,
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better at math,
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than
girls
,
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,
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students
are still distracted by games.
For instance
, some new papers mention that there are many excellent
school
boys
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attracted completely them, In my opinion, the intersive concenture all
subjects
make
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female
females
better my τη the male. To put it simply, the personality of
girls
is not only industrious but
also
comprehensive,
thus
they terma
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learn all
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easilye
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easily
Consequently
, in
averoy
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average
score at of at
subjects
girls
always higher because they spend plenty of time for study. In my conclusion,
while
male
students
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at specific In
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females are not only
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to follow their #te plan but
also
have intensive learning in all
subjects
.
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