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Television had become the most popular form of entertainment for children these days and has led to damaging consequences for their health. Why is this the case now? What can parents do to take children away from watching so much television?

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Children
 all over the world are now addicted to watching television and paediatricians worry that it can have a negative impact on their health. In
this
 essay, I will be delving into some of the possible causes and
also
 suggesting the probable solutions to them. I believe one of the major causes of
this
 issue is
due to
 poor parenting skills. Parents nowadays are not as strict as they used to be and
for
this
reason
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children
 adopt ugly behaviours, and instil naughty and harmful behaviours. The solution to
this
 problem is to implement older parenting techniques that
implement
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 harsher punishments so that
children
 cannot have their way and bring about smarter
children
. Another possible cause is that we live in a digital age, a world where we cannot function without looking at screens all the time, which is
also
 evident in daycare centres,
thus
 we’re enforcing
such
 problematic behaviour. It is the government’s responsibility to work with daycare centres to split between screen use and traditional methods
such
 as reading physical textbooks,
as well as
, teachers should encourage outdoor activities as much as possible as
this
 can be beneficial for them in their upbringing as well.
To conclude
, new-age parents do not know how to discipline their
children
 at home and screen time has drastically increased at preschool
such
 that the
children
 end up spending a lot of time in front of the television.
Thus
,
this
 has led to many
children
 having a lot of negative health issues in the future. The possible solution to
this
 problem is modern parents should be able to discipline
children
 well in order to promote good behaviours in them,
as well as
, the government body and kindergarten should join hands together and come up with a balanced / healthy school program to enrich the next generation.
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