Television had become the most popular form of entertainment for children these days and has led to damaging consequences for their health. Why is this the case now? What can parents do to take children away from watching so much television?

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all over the world are now addicted to watching television and paediatricians worry that it can have a negative impact on their health. In
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essay, I will be delving into some of the possible causes and
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suggesting the probable solutions to them. I believe one of the major causes of
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issue is
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poor parenting skills. Parents nowadays are not as strict as they used to be and
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reason
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children
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adopt ugly behaviours, and instil naughty and harmful behaviours. The solution to
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problem is to implement older parenting techniques that
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harsher punishments so that
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cannot have their way and bring about smarter
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. Another possible cause is that we live in a digital age, a world where we cannot function without looking at screens all the time, which is
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evident in daycare centres,
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we’re enforcing
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problematic behaviour. It is the government’s responsibility to work with daycare centres to split between screen use and traditional methods
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as reading physical textbooks,
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, teachers should encourage outdoor activities as much as possible as
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can be beneficial for them in their upbringing as well.
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, new-age parents do not know how to discipline their
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at home and screen time has drastically increased at preschool
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that the
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end up spending a lot of time in front of the television.
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,
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has led to many
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having a lot of negative health issues in the future. The possible solution to
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problem is modern parents should be able to discipline
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well in order to promote good behaviours in them,
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, the government body and kindergarten should join hands together and come up with a balanced / healthy school program to enrich the next generation.
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