The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.

The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.
The presented diagram provides the average
number
of
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students
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in one
class
categorized
to
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primary
schools
and lower secondary
schools
in 6 distinct countries compared to the worldwide average
number
in 2006.
Overall
, South Korea
was
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had
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the highest average
number
of pupils both in primary
schools
and in secondary
schools
.
On the contrary
, Mexico experienced
as
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the lowest
number
of
student
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students
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in primary
schools
and
then
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the
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United Kingdom showed the fewest
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students
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who
study
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in Lower secondary
school
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schools
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in 2016. Upon
further
observation, starting from the
number
of Primary school
student
, there was around 25
students
per
class
in
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on
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average in the
world
in 2016. South Korea and Japan had a higher average
number
of
student
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students
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than the
word
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world
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which accounted for 34
students
per
class
and 29
students
per
class
,
repectively
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respectively
.
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Furthermore
,
United
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the United
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Kingdom, the third highest
student
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number of students
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per
class
in Primary school,
also
had a higher
number
of
student
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students
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than the
world
which
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apply
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around
to
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27
students
per
class
.
Otherwise
, the average
number
of
student
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students
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in the
world
still
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is still
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dominated than three
others
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other
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countries namely Mexico, Denmark, and Iceland. Turning to the lower secondary data, South Korea (36
students
), Japan (34
students
), and Mexico (30
students
) were the three highest
number
of
students
per
class
in 2016. They were defeated
the
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world
student
number
which only around
to
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27
students
in
class
.
On the other hand
, The data of
student
number
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numbers
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per
class
in
United
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the United
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Kingdom, Denmark and Ireland showed a considerable
below the
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below-the-world
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world
data which accounted for 18
students
, 21
students
, and 20
students
.
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