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The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.

The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.
#bar #size #class #schools #countries #world
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The presented diagram provides the average
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 in one
class
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 categorized
to
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into
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 primary
schools
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 and lower secondary
schools
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 in 6 distinct countries compared to the worldwide average
number
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 in 2006.
Overall
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, South Korea
was
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had
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 the highest average
number
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 of pupils both in primary
schools
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 and in secondary
schools
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.
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, Mexico experienced
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the lowest
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 in primary
schools
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 and
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then
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the
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 United Kingdom showed the fewest
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student
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students
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 who
study
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studied
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 in Lower secondary
school
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schools
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 in 2016. Upon
further
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 observation, starting from the
number
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 of Primary school
student
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, there was around 25
students
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 per
class
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in
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on
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 average in the
world
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 in 2016. South Korea and Japan had a higher average
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 than the
word
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world
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 which accounted for 34
students
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 per
class
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 and 29
students
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 per
class
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,
repectively
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respectively
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, the third highest
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student
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number of students
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 per
class
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 in Primary school,
also
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 had a higher
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 than the
world
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which
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apply
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around
to
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apply
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27
students
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 per
class
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.
Otherwise
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, the average
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 in the
world
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still
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is still
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 dominated than three
others
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other
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 countries namely Mexico, Denmark, and Iceland. Turning to the lower secondary data, South Korea (36
students
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 ), Japan (34
students
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), and Mexico (30
students
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) were the three highest
number
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 of
students
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 per
class
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 in 2016. They were defeated
the
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by the
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world
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student
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number
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 which only around
to
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27
students
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 in
class
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.
On the other hand
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, The data of
student
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number
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numbers
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 per
class
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, Denmark and Ireland showed a considerable
below the
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below-the-world
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world
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 data which accounted for 18
students
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, 21
students
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, and 20
students
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, student, class, schools, students, world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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