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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the
number
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 of
students
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 who study in 6 distinct science subjects categorized into men and
women
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 at a certain UK university in 2009.
Overall
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, both males and females had the highest
number
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 of research
pupils
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 in biology
subject
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.
On the contrary
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,
women
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 had the least
number
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 of participants in physics and men showed the fewest
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 of research
students
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 in veterinary medicine. Upon
further
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 observation, biology
subject
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 experienced as the most popular field in a UK university. The males and females had the most
number
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 among 5 other subjects which accounted for 230-man
students
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 and 200-woman
students
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.
Furthermore
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, physics was the second most popular
subject
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 for male
pupils
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 with around 220
students
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.
However
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, there was a huge gap between men and
women
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 in physics subjects where female
students
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 were only around 40
students
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. Turning to the other remaining data, veterinary medicine became the only
subject
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 that had a higher
number
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 of female
students
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 than male. There were around 120
women
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pupils
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 compared to around 80 male
pupils
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, women, pupils, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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