In many countries, not enough students study science subjects. What are the causes? What will be the effect on society?

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In many countries,

students

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do not pay attention enough to

study

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science

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subjects

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science

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countiunes

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continues

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people

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prefer to respect famous

person

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such

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singer

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influencer

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reason, many

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try to become famous

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people

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instead

scientist

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scientists

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. The second reason

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is to earn

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. Scientists not only gain less

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than other occupation but

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science

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topics

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diffucult

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difficult

study

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than other topics.

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with,

people

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always want to be respected by other

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, as a

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consequence

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, many

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have wanted to

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science

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topics in recent years,

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to change day by day because in today's world, to gain respect there is one way that

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popular

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person.

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why the

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and

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have lost its importance.

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, to

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need to strive

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their

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effort

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not

met

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their expectation

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money

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and respect.

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, few

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unwillingly work on

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subjects

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and a large proportion of

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do not

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this

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fields. When it comes to

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issue has a bad effect on society,

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society may go corruption since

people

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's minds or skills

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not important to live or work.

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doctor

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engineer

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do not reach

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possition

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and they

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less

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than some jobs like influencer. These issues have a negative impact on teenagers because

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most of smart

childeren

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children

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carry

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about

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. In the future many countries come across

shortage

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to find

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people

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doctor

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, in the future,

people

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encounter many problems

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as health or wealth because they give rise to

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problem by paying attention to unnecessary jobs like

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