IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

In many countries, not enough students study science subjects. What are the causes? What will be the effect on society?

#countries #students #study #science #subjects #effect #society
In many countries,
students
 do not pay attention enough to
study
science
subjects
.
This
 is because
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
science
countiunes
Correct your spelling
continues
 to lose its importance because in today's
world
Add a comma
,world
show examples
people
 prefer to respect famous
person
Change the noun form
people
show examples
such
 as
singer
Fix the agreement mistake
singers
show examples
 or
influencer
Fix the agreement mistake
influencers
show examples
.
For
this
 reason, many
student
Change to a plural noun
students
show examples
 try to become famous
person
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
intead
Correct your spelling
instead
 of
scientist
Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
show examples
. The second reason
why
Rephrase
apply
show examples
is to earn
money
. Scientists not only gain less
money
 than other occupation but
also
science
 topics
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
 more
diffucult
Correct your spelling
difficult
 to
study
 than other topics.
To begin
 with,
people
 always want to be respected by other
people
, as a
consequance
Correct your spelling
consequence
this
, many
students
 have wanted to
study
science
 topics in recent years,
however
,
this
 situation
commence
Change the verb form
commences
show examples
 to change day by day because in today's world, to gain respect there is one way that
become
Change the verb form
becomes
show examples
popular
Add an article
a popular
show examples
 person.
That is
 why the
science
 and
science
subjects
 have lost its importance.
Moreover
, to
study
science
,
students
 need to strive
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 their
subjects
;
nevertheless
,
this
 effort
do
Change the verb form
does
show examples
 not
met
Change the verb form
meet
show examples
 their expectation
such
 as
money
 and respect.
Thus
, few
students
 unwillingly work on
science
subjects
 and a large proportion of
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
show examples
 do not
study
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
 fields. When it comes to
this
 issue has a bad effect on society,
it
Capitalize word
It
show examples
 can be obviously said that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society may go corruption since
people
's minds or skills
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 not important to live or work.
For example
, intelligent
scientist
Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
show examples
,
doctor
Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
show examples
 or
engineer
Fix the agreement mistake
engineers
show examples
 do not reach
to deserve
Verb problem
apply
show examples
possition
Correct your spelling
positions
 and they
gain
Verb problem
earn
show examples
 less
money
 than some jobs like influencer. These issues have a negative impact on teenagers because
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
most of smart
childeren
Correct your spelling
children
 do not
carry
Verb problem
care
show examples
 about
science
. In the future many countries come across
shortage
Correct article usage
a shortage
show examples
 to find
skills
Replace the word
skilled
show examples
people
 like
doctor
Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
show examples
.
To conclude
, in the future,
people
 encounter many problems
such
 as health or wealth because they give rise to
this
 problem by paying attention to unnecessary jobs like
influencer
Fix the agreement mistake
influencers
show examples
.
Submitted by eerkare on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: