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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #people #children #home #child’s #development #school #methods
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 people believe that teaching
children
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home
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 is best for a
child
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's development
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 others think that it is important for
children
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 to go to
school
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.
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 educating a
child
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's with quality is
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the responsible
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responsible
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for
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of
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government
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the government
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 and the
citizen's
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citizens
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. Teaching
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children
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children
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 is best for a
child
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's development.Educating
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home
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 is stressless and they
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find it
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 easy to
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there
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because there
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not be
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are
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any
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 conditions to do the
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.Some
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child's
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children
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 don't take any
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to
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for studying
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study
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 they can do what they think.Some
child
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's they love to
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 and if they
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child's
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children
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 take a break often they
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 without any stress if any health issues
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 to
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child's
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children
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 they can take a long break there
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 no attendance for that and there
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 no fees for educating
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childrens
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children
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 at
home
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.They can
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Google
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 if any
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 and they can save more time.They can
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 more when
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compared
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 to
school
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 and they cover the full portions very quickly.When they are
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apply
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alone they know how to tackle the problems with the portions.They spend most of
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their
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 time with their families and they can't
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feel
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 that they
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are
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 not separated
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 their families.Surprisingly no
homeworks
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homework
to
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for
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 the
students
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 they
feel
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felt
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 free
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study
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 and no punishments were given by teachers if they
were
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did
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 not do the
work
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.
some
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peoples
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people
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 taught
that is
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 important for
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childrens
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children
children's
 to go to
school
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.A
school
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 is a place for educating
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childrens
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children
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 with
best
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the best
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 quality.
Governments
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schools
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 are there for free education and some private
schools
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that
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apply
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are paid.
School
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 is the best place to learn to be good
citizen
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citizens
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 with
standarized
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standardised
 educational methods like
task
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tasks
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 given by teachers
if
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 they are done
their
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with their
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work
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 punishments will given by teachers.
Students
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 would
afraid
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be afraid
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 of teacher's punishments and they do their
work
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 properly.There are more protocols followed by
schools
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 to ensure the education system of the country.
Teacher
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Teachers
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 would clear the
doubts
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 if any
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raised
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were raised
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 to
students
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insomecases
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in some cases
,they practically clear the
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 with their subjects.In
schools
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 lab facilities available to the
students
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 for their practicals
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this
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 would be play
a
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 important role they can understand easily by practice.In
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schools
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,schools
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 they can play with their friends and
study
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 the
standarized
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standardised
 portions. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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,
that is
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 important for
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childrens
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children
children's
 to go to
school
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eventhough
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even though
 teaching
a
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apply
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children
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 at
home
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 is stressless but
that is
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 important to go to
school
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for teaching
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to teach
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 a
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child's
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child
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with
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apply
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the
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apply
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standarized
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standardised
 educational methods.
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