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it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music,and others are not.However,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both these views and giveyour opinions.

Talent
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skills
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 are two contrary ways of knowing something,
talent
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 is ingrained in a
person
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skills
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 are learned. Both of them have their own set of pros and cons but it can never be said success can be achieved only through
talent
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.
This
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 essay will focus on how talents and
skills
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 help
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person
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a person
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 succeed with relevant examples. I partially agree with the fact that
people
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 born with
talent
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 have it
easy
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 than the
people
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 who learn it. We see a lot of players struggling to perform well in their sports because of genetics. There are great personalities like Aryabhatta who was extremely intelligent,he had no access to
internet
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 but he could come up with mind-blowing ideas like the invention of zero and determining the value of pi. A lot of
people
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 believed that he was naturally gifted.
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 a different set of
people
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 who very firmly believe that everything can be learnt or understood.
Skills
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 are extremely important for improving your attributes and promoting good work.
Skills
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 can be learned and improved with proper guidance. There are remarkable personalities who have made it so big in life by only using their
skills
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 right. Ratan Tata did not have a
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 business, he started everything from scratch by setting up India's first industry in Jamshedpur. He had immense dedication,hard work and perseverance to achieve great heights and make his country proud.
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,
talent
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 and
skills
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 are quite different from each other but there is nothing in
this
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 world that cannot be
learnt
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. A
person
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 born with
talent
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also
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 has to train himself to identify his
strength
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strengths
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 and
weakness
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weaknesses
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whereas
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 a
person
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 who learns a particular skill probably has a better understanding of the task.

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