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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods.

#gym #methods
Several individuals consider that
the
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gym
centers
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 would be the best for
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the human’s
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human’s
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body
 to keep fit.
However
, the opposites have
a
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thought that
people
 still have many other ways to bring benefits
for
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to
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 their own
body
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. The author of
this
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agree
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 with the
idea
 of having more different methods and still
bring enable
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 advantages. Human have
a
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thought of
the
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other treatments
would
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 lead to an effective result
may
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because they can be active on their own
schedule
. They would like to create their own diet
schedule
 and prepare
for
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themselves
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different diet meals.
Instead
 of going to the
gym
, there are many diverse choices of sports for
people
 to keep fit as we can see like yoga or ballet. They do not have to push themselves
in
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a hard way and still have
a
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good
healthy
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 with
a
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 idealistic
body
.
Besides
,
people
 have the opinion of more effective methods
also
 because they do not have to pay
for
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too much money and can control their finance
spend
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spending
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 on many
others
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other
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 things
instead
 of
gym
course
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courses
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 and professional
sport
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sports
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 clothes.
However
, the
idea
 of
the
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going to the
gym
 to keep fit because of its hard
schedule
 and its profession.
People
 need to pay for a course of
practicing
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practising
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 with
many
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much
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 modern
equipment
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equipments
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chose
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chosen
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 by the
people
 who already have knowledge about
gym
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the gym
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. That would bring the best results for them
of
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 they always focus on their plans and try hard every
day
.
Furthermore
, having your personal coach is certainly available for you in any
gym
centers
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 when you rent them. That leads to the reason that you will have to be punctual and have several good
advices
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advice
in
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on
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 your diet
by
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from
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 a professor. Your daily life will be improved
day
 by
day
 and increase the effects more every
day
.
Moreover
, when you focus on
the
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your
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schedule
 and come to the
gym
center
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centre
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 usually, they would offer you many free services and bargains. In conclusion, some human would like the
gym
 to keep their
body
in
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fit is the best choice
whereas
 the opposite have the
idea
 of many other methods bring more
enable
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advantages. I have my opinion on the
idea
 of having your own treatments because it would be better for your mental health and you will not have the stress in your
finance
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finances
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 every
months
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month
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leads
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leading
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 to your free on your lifestyle

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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