The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the envirnonment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

In many countries across the world, it is argued that
people
should be predominantly focused on protecting the environment. The government should close
companies
that produce toxic
waste
materials without their own
waste
treatment facilities. I completely agree with
this
view and will give my reasons below.
Firstly
, it is necessary for all
companies
to have
waste
treatment
facility
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facilities
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. Without any recycling methods,
the
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apply
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chemical
waste
are
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is
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dumbed in
this
world. It will become
harmfull
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harmful
to the
people
.
For example
,
the
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plastic
is the most popular
waste
which are used as
one
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a
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use
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one-use
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product. The company must have
recycle
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a recycling
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system for their
plastic
waste
. If
this
plastic
are
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is
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not
recyled
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recycled
, it will pollute water, land and so on. Because
,
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plastic
takes thousands of years to decompose on
earth
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Earth
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.
In addition
, there
are
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is
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some chemical
waste
in industries,
this
waste
should be properly disposed
or
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of or
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recycled without
making
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causing
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any pollution in the environment.
However
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in some petroleum industries, the chemical
waste
are
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is
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mixed into the ocean.
Therefore
, the
spieces
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species
pieces
in
this
ocean are affected by
this
chemical
waste
.
Inspite
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In spite
of
this
situation there are many species in endanger.
Furthermore
, some
companies
mix their
waste
into rivers,
this
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which
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lead
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leads
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to
people
suffer
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who consume river water.
This
cause
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causes
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multiple
disease
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to
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in
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the
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apply
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people
around the world.
To sum up
, the
upper mentioned
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reasons let us give the opinion that
government
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the government
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should close the
companies
that
creates
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create
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pollution in the environment. And government should help to improve the
recycle
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recycling
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treatment
facility
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facilities
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among
companies
.
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