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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the
points
 of different
services
 which were given by
three
health
 centres. The
points
 were marked by patients who evaluated the
three
health
 centre
services
, including
Longston
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Langston
Center
, Peveril
Center
, and
Marchbank
Center
.
Overall
, among the
three
health
 centres, Peveril
Center
 got the highest
points
 on average, followed by
Marchbank
Center
 and
Longston
Center
.
Besides
 the rank of
overall
 averages, all other aspects of
services
 followed the same rank pattern. The patients marked different
services
 by numbers which represent the quality of their
services
 from very poor to excellent from one to ten. It is worth noticing that Peveril
Center
 got 9.6
points
 and 9.1 on response to concerns and booking appointments respectively.
Marchbank
Center
 and
Longston
Center
 were both evaluated as their best score
at
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 doctor’s
services
 at 8.4 and 8.0 respectively. Among the
three
health
centers
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, only
Longston
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Langston
Center
’s
services
 were marked lower than 6. The score of
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Langston
Center
’s response to concerns merely got 4.3
points
while
Marchbank
Center
 was marked at 7.2.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, services, three, health, longston, center, marchbank with synonyms.
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