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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
points
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 of different
services
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 which were given by
three
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health
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 centres. The
points
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 were marked by patients who evaluated the
three
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health
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 centre
services
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, including
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Longston
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Langston
Center
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, Peveril
Center
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, and
Marchbank
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Center
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.
Overall
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, among the
three
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health
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 centres, Peveril
Center
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 got the highest
points
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 on average, followed by
Marchbank
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Center
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 and
Longston
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Center
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.
Besides
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 the rank of
overall
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 averages, all other aspects of
services
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 followed the same rank pattern. The patients marked different
services
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 by numbers which represent the quality of their
services
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 from very poor to excellent from one to ten. It is worth noticing that Peveril
Center
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 got 9.6
points
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 and 9.1 on response to concerns and booking appointments respectively.
Marchbank
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Center
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 and
Longston
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Center
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 were both evaluated as their best score
at
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for
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 doctor’s
services
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 at 8.4 and 8.0 respectively. Among the
three
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health
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centers
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centres
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, only
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Longston
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Langston
Center
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’s
services
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 were marked lower than 6. The score of
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Longston
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Langston
Center
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’s response to concerns merely got 4.3
points
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while
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Marchbank
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Center
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 was marked at 7.2.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, services, three, health, longston, center, marchbank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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