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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
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The maps illustrate the development of Stockefort over a 40-year period from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 a rural area changed into an urbanized town. The village was much more ancient in 1930 than in 2010.
To begin
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 with, a notable change was that the farmland which was placed on the south and east sides of the map was cut down to build huge houses. The farmland would be very good to show farmland.
Moreover
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, the shops were replaced by huge houses which were placed on the south of the map.
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, The primary school was enlarged with more area. Another striking change was that the garden with a vast area was redeveloped into small areas.
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, the large house was transformed into a retirement home and trees were cut down

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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