You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
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chart displays
a
Correct article usage
the
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number
of tourists
went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
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to a specific
island
Called
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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during 3 years between 2010 to 2017.
Overall
,
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the anumber
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anumber
Correct your spelling
number
of
visitor
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visitors
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staying on
ships
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
have fluctuated
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.
besidies
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besides
, there was a fluctuation in
number
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a number
the number
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of visitors Staying on
island
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the island
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but generally trend was an
increase
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increasing
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trend .
the
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The
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chart displays on years and
number
of visitors.
To begin
with, as We Said before the following was up words trends generally.
Secondly
, the
number
of people
in
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from
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2010 to 2011
were
Verb problem
apply
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increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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but member of visitors staying on
island
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the island
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was above
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
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were staying on
ships
. It recorded in 2010 just Over 0.5
millions
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million
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and just under 0.5 million respectively. And in 2011 just over
0.5millions
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0.5 million
and
0.5millions
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0.5 million
respectively .
In
addition
Add a comma
,addition
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people who
staying
Wrong verb form
stayed
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on
island
Add an article
the island
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continue
Wrong verb form
continued
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to be above
who
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those who
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staying
Wrong verb form
stayed
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in
chips
Capitalize word
Chips
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until 2015
to
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apply
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Socore
on
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apply
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it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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1.5
millions
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million
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on
island
Add an article
the island
an island
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, and Socre just under 1.5
millions
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million
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on
ships
.
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
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people who live on
Correct article usage
the
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Island
become under those who live
in
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on
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ships
to hit 1.5
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
, and just
obove
Correct your spelling
above
1.5
millioms
Correct your spelling
million
millions
respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, ships, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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