Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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educational courses which are
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in school are
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a controversial
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controversy.
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some people, subjects like
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and
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are the most important
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and school's
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should be
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on scientific and technological aspects
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modern
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world.
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, other
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of people think historical
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should be the concentration. In
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essay
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both sides are about to be open to discussion. It is a fact that children should meet
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world's updated requirements. These days, working with
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and being aware of scientific discoveries are inevitable. Based on
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, teaching
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and
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in schools prior to historical
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,
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concern.
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a child without
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experience
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using
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and with no awareness of great scientific findings can not survive through
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of modern society. On the other page of
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the story
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, a child must be aware of the
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in which he/she is thriving. Being well-familiar with historical aspects of the society in which you were born and you are living, can greatly benefit decisions that you make in the current world. Because of the very popular quote that "
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repeats itself", I child
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is not educated enough to know historical events, would not be able to make proper decisions in time that previous
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happen. In my opinion, both sides need considerable attention. But
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and scientific subjects
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much more than historical
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. The reason would be that by using
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and
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, we are enabling ourselves to predict mass incidences which will probably occur.
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, I do believe that
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does not repeat itself.
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, in every period of
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history,
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we experience something completely different.
To conclude
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, I strongly support the idea that
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and
technology
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must seek much more attention than
history
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.
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  • Historical perspective
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  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
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  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
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