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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #history #school #subjects #today’s #world #science #technology
Now days
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 educational courses which are
thought
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taught
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 in school are
mentionable
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a controversial
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 controversy.
According to
 some people, subjects like
technology
 and
science
 are the most important
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 and school's
focuses
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focus
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 should be
fixated
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apply
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on scientific and technological aspects
on
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modern
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the modern
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 world.
In contrast
, other
group
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 of people think historical
subject
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subjects
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 should be the concentration. In
following
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the following
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essay
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essay,
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 both sides are about to be open to discussion. It is a fact that children should meet
today
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today's
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 world's updated requirements. These days, working with
technology
 and being aware of scientific discoveries are inevitable. Based on
this
, teaching
science
 and
technology
 in schools prior to historical
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,
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 would be
feasible
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a feasible
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 concern.
For
instance
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 a child without
no
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any
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 experience
about
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in
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 using
technology
 and with no awareness of great scientific findings can not survive through
needs
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the needs
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 of modern society. On the other page of
story
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the story
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, a child must be aware of the
history
 in which he/she is thriving. Being well-familiar with historical aspects of the society in which you were born and you are living, can greatly benefit decisions that you make in the current world. Because of the very popular quote that "
history
 repeats itself", I child
which
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 is not educated enough to know historical events, would not be able to make proper decisions in time that previous
incidences
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 happen. In my opinion, both sides need considerable attention. But
technology
 and scientific subjects
weight
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weigh
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 much more than historical
one
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ones
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. The reason would be that by using
science
 and
technology
, we are enabling ourselves to predict mass incidences which will probably occur.
Besides
, I do believe that
history
 does not repeat itself.
In contrast
, in every period of
history
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history,
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 we experience something completely different.
To conclude
, I strongly support the idea that
science
 and
technology
 must seek much more attention than
history
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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