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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the ten
countries
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 which are the top ten
countries
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 in manufacturing and consuming
electricity
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 by their
rank
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 in 2014. As an overview,
China
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 had the
first
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rank
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 in both
production
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 and
consumption
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 among other
countries
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 in 2014.
On the other hand
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, Korea has the least
production
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 and
consumption
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 among those
countries
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 in the given time period.
This
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 country has a negligible
difference
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 in both criteria that are discussed for
electricity
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 with the
rank
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 9th country which is Germany. As can be observable,
China
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 achieved the
first
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rank
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 in
production
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 by producing 5498 billion
kWh
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 which is a significant
difference
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 from the United
States
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, which held the second
rank
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 in manufacturing.To be more precise,
China
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 produces approximately 1300
kWh
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 more than the United
States
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.There is a huge
difference
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 in the number (nearly 3000 kW) between the United
States
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 and Russia ,which are in the second and third
rank
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 respectively, in the
production
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 of
electricity
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. Afterwards ,
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in russia
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russia
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Russia
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 there are insignificant differences in manufacturing between the
countries
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.
Furthermore
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,
China
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also
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 held the
first
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rank
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 in
consumption
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 with 5322
kWh
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.There is a roughly 1400
kWh
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difference
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 between the
first
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 and second ranks in the given graph. The highest
difference
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 between ranks in
electricity
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consumption
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 belongs to the United
States
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 and Russia with close to a 2800
kWh
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difference
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. The differences in
production
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 among other
countries
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 are insignificant.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, rank, china, first, production, consumption, difference, kwh, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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