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The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005

The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005
The line graph compares, car theft, house
burgling
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burglary
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 and street
robbery
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 in England and Wales between the years 1970 and 2005. To summarize, in the given period in England and
Wales
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,Wales
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 the number of cars stolen stood first followed by house
burgling
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burglary
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 and road
robbery
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. In the
year
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 1970, street
robbery
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 was minimal,
while
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 0.2
million
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 and 0.4
million
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 housing burgling and the number of cars missed respectively. Till the
year
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 1990, road
robbery
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 remained the same,
then
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 slightly processed in the
year
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 2005.
However
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, until 1980 crime rate rapidly increased in housing burgling and car theft.
Further
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, house theft stayed neutral till the
year
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 1985 with 0.6
million
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, later rose for a few years and dropped to 0.5
million
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 in the
year
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 2005.
On the contrary
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, the number of cars stolen increased till the
year
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 1995,
whereas
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 after that started to decline and reached 1
million
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 in the
year
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 2005.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words robbery, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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