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You recently bought an electric gadget for your home. Your friend wants the same gadget and needs your advice. In this letter you should include: What the gadget is What you think about it Advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

#gadget #home #friend #advice #alternatives
Dear Mia, Hope everything is going well in your life. I just bought a new pair of headphones, and that makes me remember you. I clearly remember during our
last
 conversation, that you
also
 wanted to buy the same gadget from the brand Sony. I purchased it from one of the shops near my house. When I started using it, at first I found it very comfortable in terms of fitting on the head. There are some special features like outside noise control and a comfortable cushion pad for speakers. The most important thing is you can control the voice itself from headphones. I am completely satisfied with the instruments, I suggest you go for them.
However
,I suggest you look for other brands,
for example
, Boat or Zebronic. In comparison to Sony price for the above two brands is cheaper, but not sure about their quality. Hope
this
 letter will help you solve your confusion with buying. Soon want to have your new headphones. Yours lovingly, Jen.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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