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Traveling in a group assisted by a tour guide is the best way to travel. How much do you agree or disagree with this assertion?

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In
this
 modern day, travelling become a trend among
people
 of all generations. Travelling can be an option for
people
 who want to have a break from their activities. In terms of travelling options, it is believed
by
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some
people
 are recommended to
travel
 by being a part of a
group
 and having a
tour
guide
 to assist and I completely agree with
this
 recommendation. In
this
 particular essay, I will explain several reasons why
this
 way of
travel
 is a good choice. The reason why
being
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 a part of a
group
 is they do not need to manage the itinerary. They only need to prepare their luggage and themselves to
travel
.
In addition
,
traveller
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travellers
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do no
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no
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not
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 need to feel confused about where is the best area to visit and stay. It is because most likely a
group
 of
travel
 have been managed by the
tour
 company complete with the itinerary and accommodation needs. For
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the traveler
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traveler
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traveller
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 who is too busy with their life, by joining the
travel
group
 they can prepare
their
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 trip efficiently without any disruption to their activities before
having
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a
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 trip.
Moreover
, when travelers in a
group
of
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trip, they will get a
tour
guide
 to assist them during the
tour
. In general, the
tour
guide
 will help
people
 gain new information about the place that they will visit in the destination, which sometimes
it
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is hard to
found
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find
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 by tourists because some places
is
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a public places
that
is
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are
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 no area with specific
informationinformation
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information
.
For example
, when they are visiting
a
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the
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 Museum Fatahillah in Jakarta, Indonesia. Since it is a public place with a huge yard in front of the Museum, it will be troublesome for the tourists to get the information about
Museum
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the Museum
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.
Hence
, the one and only way to get the story behind the place is from the
tour
guide
. To summarize, joining a
travel
group
 with a
tour
guide
 as an assistant is a great option. It is because
travelers
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travellers
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 do not need to manage any
travel
 needs since the
travel
 lead will work on it.
Furthermore
, they
also
 can gain new information about the destination from the
tour
guide
 easily.
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