Some people think it is important to keep and maintain old buildings rather than replacing them with modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagre?

Nowadays, several individuals believe that it is essential to save
the
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apply
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old
buildings
better
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rather
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than changing them with contemporary
buildings
. I partly agree with that idea.
This
reason
that
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why
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plenty of
people
fell
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feel
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like
themselves
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they
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as coming back to their
childhood
. When they have been to their old
buildings
. On the one hand, one of the good
site
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sites
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of keeping the old
buildings
is so beneficial for humans.
While
, developing
the
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modern
buildings
.
Firstly
, old
buildings
really help you to remember your
childhood
.
In addition
, you can remember
enthusiastic
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the enthusiastic
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days which they had happened in your
childhood
and
secondly
, these
buildings
were built very convenient to live in. Because highly quality materials were spent on old
buildings
.
Therefore
,
this
type of building would
very
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sturdy.
Nevertheless
, Currently, old
buildings
are disappearing day by day.
This
reason
that
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why
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many
people
choose
the
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apply
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modern
buildings
.
However
, they do not know that they prefer modern
buildings
rather than old
buildings
which
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in which
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people
have lived since their
childhood's
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childhood
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area
On the other hand
, old houses are not necessary for the present generation. In my view, it is
a
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true . It's because the world is developing and
also
people
try
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are trying
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to create new technology. Especially,
requirement
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the requirement
a requirement
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of modern
buildings
is increasing significantly.
As a result
, old
buildings
are replaced with modern
buildings
by
people
.
This
reason
that
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why
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many
people
say that modern
buildings
are
so
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more
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comfortable to
liver
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live
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than
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in than
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old
buildings
.
For instance
, you can buy a fully furnished building at the moment.
Besides
, new
buildings
are being built gorgeous. If you do not buy
this
type of building, you might
regret
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. To summarize, it will be successful
to improve
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in improving
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new
buildings
in the future. But, we should not forget that keeping the old
buildings
is so crucial for all of us.‌‌
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