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Developments in tourism offer very little direct benefit for residents who live in these areas. To what extent do you agree?

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Tourism
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 is a way to give
people
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 rest and relax. Mostly
people
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 choose places which suit them accourding to thier needs, like quite place and friendly
people
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. they need to feel they are welcome in that place. Fist of all, I am agree with statment, which said "developments in
tourism
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 offer very little direct benefit for residents who live in these area". For many reasons like: firsr,
tourism
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 suport the economy ,help it to increase and be better. the second one, encourge residents to develop them self to be in the same value with incoming
people
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, ex: learning new launguges and skills to deal with them.
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tourism
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 helping with discover new cultures which opens new ways in life. Making
people
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 learn form each other bussiness, skills and ideas.
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,the residents will have different ideas for thier work and life style, like openning a fast food resturant in small vallige. or building a sport gym in spcieal place in nuture.
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, to have the biggest amuont of benefit for resident, they have to be friendly, loving streng
people
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 who speak another luanguge, being more interactive with them and trying to have itersting way to spend the time which tourist come in.

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