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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit others think there are more effective methos. Disscuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that the best solution to keep fit is doing gymnastics.
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, it said that it has a
lot
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 of different effective
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way
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 to stay in shape.
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idea
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 and my opinion to deal with that problem. Nowadays, the demand of people
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the
keeping
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 fit
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staying
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stay
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health
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 body is
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 increasing dramatically. Cause to
gymnastic
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 is very popular for the best and fastest
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 to
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 a pretty fit.
Gymnastic
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 has a
lot
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 of advantages to do the exercise because of the various
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the
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devices.
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, there is the personal trainer who
help
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helps
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we
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 train more effectively
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safety
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.
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, the gym rooms have a
lot
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different equipment to improve
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the physical field. On the other
hands
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hand
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, doing
gymnastic
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gymnastics
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 isn’t the best
way
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 to keep fit
that
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so
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 going on
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diet
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a diet
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is
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also
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seem
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seems
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the
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an
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 effective option. Most
of
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people
who
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don’t have too much time to
going
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go to
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 the gym. Going on
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diet
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a diet
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 is
also
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 rather easy to do because
the
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 basic condition to do. The
others
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other
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way
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 is playing
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sports. It
helps
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provides
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 a
lot
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 of benefits in developing the
muscle
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muscles
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physical
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the physical
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.
According to
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better
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 to go on
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diet
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a diet
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 and do gymnastics at the same
times
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time
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. Because
,
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 doing
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gymnastic
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gymnastics
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 without
the
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a
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diet
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 is not
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also keep
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keeping
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 fit effectively and completely. In conclusion,
doing
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going
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the
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to the
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 gym is not the best
way
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 to keep fit
healthy
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and healthy
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that
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because
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 there are a
lot
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 of
face
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the
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feature
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that effect
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the progress of
the
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apply
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staying in shape

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