Some people believe that school holidays should be longer to give students more time to relax and enjoy their free time. Others argue that shorter holidays are necessary to maintain a strong focus on academic studies. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In places all over the
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students
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are having extended summer
holidays
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. I believe that these
holidays
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are having a positive impact on the academic life of
students
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. The long vacations cause the learning period to be shorter
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more condensed
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more stressful. But in
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stress is proven to increase the working capacity of
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increasing their chance of success in their important exams. A student will always be much more satisfied from working hard, getting good results and having long and relaxing
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than by being less productive throughout the term
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getting bad grades or failing and
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having short
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and having to retake classes in order to maybe have a better grade on their exam.
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, longer
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are very important for international
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may live very far away from where they study. Allowing them to take longer
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is very beneficial for them as they will be able to go back to their home country in order to see their family or their friends.
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is very important for the mental health of the
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. Not seeing their family for an extended period of time may cause depression or
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other sorts of mental health issues
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.
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added to the potential bad grades will certainly put any
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students
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in a terrible state of mind.
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, in my opinion, extended
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wouldn’t solve various problems for
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while
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shortening their
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would cause many problems. As cited in the above. Beyond the grades, the mental health of the
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is extremely important and should be preserved.
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