The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population of four Asian Countries living in cities 9090 from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for and 9040.
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Countries
from 2030 1970 to 2020, with forecast
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the philippines
philippines
. Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia.
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Philippines
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The Philippines
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Philippines'
Philippine's
population
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percentage
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a decline
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the Philippines
Philippines
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Philippine's
Philippines'
population
was more than other
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in other
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three
countries
. In 1970 Indonesia
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Indonesia's
Population
percentage
was less than the other three Countries
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Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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the population
percentage
will rapidly increase from 2030 to 2040.Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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will rise in four Asian countries
in the future.Submitted by heshanij9 on
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