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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population of four Asian Countries living in cities 9090 from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for and 9040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population of four Asian Countries living in cities 9090 from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for and 9040.
#information #percentage #population #four #asian #countries #cities #prediction
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The line graph illustrates the information about
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 of the
residence
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 in four Asian
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 from 2030 1970 to 2020, with
forecast
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 for
and
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2040. Asian
countries
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 are
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the philippines
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philippines
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. Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. I will compare the line graph .
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 with, in 1940.
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The Philippines
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Philippines
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population
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percentatage
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percentage
 began at below 40%. Steadily rose over the 20 years to reach below 50 in 1990. The figure was
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a decline
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decline
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 from 1990 to 2010 In 1970,
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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population
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 was more than
other
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thee
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three
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countries
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. In 1970
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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Population
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percentage
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 was less than the other three
Countries
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 1970 to 2020, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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population
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was
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gradually climbed.
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 2030 to 2040 ,
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population
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the population
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percentage
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 will rapidly increase from 2030 to 2040.
Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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population
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percentage
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 will
more
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 than the other three
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countries
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countries'
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 percentages
in
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from
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 2030 to 2040.
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,
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 2030 to 2040, the
population
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percentage
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 will rise in four Asian
countries
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 in the future.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, countries, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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