The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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The given bar chart compares the
number
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of male and female
students
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who attended
further
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education in the UK, and whether they chose full-time or part-time study over a 20-year period.
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, studying full-time was the most dominant option for both genders
although
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more
students
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decided to study part-time over the years.
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, the
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of women who received higher education experienced a substantial increase. Concerning the figures for part-time studies, there were around 100
thousand
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male
students
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studying part-time at the start of the period, doubling their female counterparts.
This
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number
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grew steadily to more than 200
thousand
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in the years 1990 and 1991. In comparison, the sum of part-time female
students
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escalated from 50
thousand
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in 1970/71 to almost 200
thousand
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in 1980/81, and finishing at the same level as males a decade later. For the full-time
students
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, the
number
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of men was about 1000
thousand
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from the beginning, being more than the females by approximately 250
thousand
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.
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of
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males fluctuated considerably throughout the years and reached 900
thousand
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at the end
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of the period.
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, full-time female scholars demonstrated a significant increase in two decades, overtaking the
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men
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by 1990/91 (1100
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).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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