The aging population is good for business, the economy and society. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
I agree with the statement that
aging
Correct article usage
the aging
people
population is Use synonyms
disadvantage
for business, economy, Add an article
a disadvantage
society
. I have some opinions about it
First of all, In my view, every business Correct word choice
and society
need
a Change the verb form
needs
people
who wants to buy something. I Use synonyms
sure
Add a missing verb
am sure
oldest
Add an article
an oldest
the oldest
person
will not have money Use synonyms
for
pay Fix the infinitive
to for
anytime
. Of Correct your spelling
time
course
maybe business products change their way to orient Add a comma
,course
of
ancient Change preposition
apply
people
, but I am not sure. Use synonyms
For example
, Arthur Linking Words
open
Wrong verb form
opened
shop
center Correct article usage
a shop
where
Correct word choice
that
sale
Replace the word
sold
a
Correct article usage
apply
clothers
for teenagers. If 90% Correct your spelling
clothes
person
in Use synonyms
area
being Add an article
the area
an area
a
older than teenagers, Arthur does not have clients.
Change the article
an
Secondly
, I believe, companies need Linking Words
a young workers
. Correct the article-noun agreement
young workers
a young worker
World
economy must have a Add an article
The world
people
Use synonyms
resource
, minds, and energy. Young minds push up Fix the agreement mistake
resources
a
economy to Change the article
an
top
. Correct article usage
the top
For instance
, universities, if Linking Words
population
Correct article usage
the population
aging
, where Change the spelling
ageing
their
find Replace the word
there
a students
? What about Correct the article-noun agreement
students
a student
Correct article usage
the sport
sport
industry, education industry, Change the noun form
sports
travel
companies? I sure they Correct word choice
and travel
are need
a young population.
Change the verb form
need
Thirdly
, Linking Words
Moreover
, Linking Words
ancient
Add an article
an ancient
the ancient
Use synonyms
person
have Fix the agreement mistake
people
a
bad health, Remove the article
apply
low
energy. They Correct word choice
and low
are need
Change the verb form
need
a
support. Yes, Remove the article
apply
businessmans
improve Correct your spelling
businessmen
businessman
a
their way Remove the article
apply
to fix
Change preposition
of fixing
this
problem. Maybe open a project where Linking Words
Use synonyms
person
Correct article usage
a person
open
Change the verb form
opens
a
app, and Change the article
an
search
Correct subject-verb agreement
searches
a
supporter. Change preposition
for a
For instance
, my sister Linking Words
travel
to Germany, Wrong verb form
travelled
with
using Change preposition
apply
program
named AuPair. Add an article
a program
This
program Linking Words
find
a worker who Change the verb form
finds
help
with Change the verb form
helps
a
homework, for Remove the article
apply
than
Replace the word
then
give
them Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
apartment
and visa to Germany.
Correct article usage
an apartment
Summarize
, I hope, Fix the infinitive
To summarize
world
Correct article usage
the world
ready
for Add a missing verb
is ready
this
trend. Linking Words
This
trend Linking Words
have
advantages and disadvantages, but I think Change the verb form
has
minus
of Correct article usage
the minus
this
Linking Words
more
than Add a missing verb
is more
plus
.Correct article usage
the plus
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