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School children are becoming far too dependent on computers and this is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children are born into the digital world. From
young
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 age, they know how to operate
computers
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,
iPad
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iPads
, and
TV
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. It is part of their daily life.
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 children
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 no exception to the
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 of
computers
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. They are confident users of
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 and very dependent on them which can lead to
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 in reading and writing
skills
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. Some teachers utilise
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computers
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 well in their lessons,
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 others avoid the
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 of
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 in their classrooms. I believe
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 balance of both is needed to help
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’ reading and writing
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to
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improve.
Computers
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 can help
students
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 with reading.
For example
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, if
students
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 come across
unknown
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 words, they can search the
unknow
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 words and hear
the
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 pronunciation. If it
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 not for
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computers
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, they have to find someone who knows how to pronounce the words for them.
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,
computers
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 can play
positive
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a positive
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 role in
students
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’ reading
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. On the other
hands
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, writing
skills
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 need to be improved by lots of handwritten works. If
students
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 are using
computers
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 all the time and getting the help of autocorrection, they will not improve their writing
skills
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. They will not know how to edit as autocorrect is doing the job for them. In conclusion, I believe that teachers should not allow
students
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 to do all the work on the
computers
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 especially writing tasks.
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,
teacher
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teachers
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 should not avoid the
use
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 of
computer
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computers
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 as
computers
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 can be a great help if they
use
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it
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 effectively. Rather than avoiding
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 that
students
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 are so used to, teachers need to come up with how to
use
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them
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 effectively to enhance
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’ reading and writing
skills
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.
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