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The graph shows the electricity production in France from 1990 and 2000

The graph shows the electricity production in France from 1990 and 2000
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The line chart illustrates
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 of electricity produced by 4 sources in France from 1980 to 2012. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the majority of
energy
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 came from nuclear power stations, and
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nuclear
energy
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 has soared during the 32 years.
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 the amount of thermal, and renewable
energy
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 remained partially constant, the
energy
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 extracted from hydroelectric stations decreased with some fluctuations
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between 1980 and 2012. In regards to
the
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nuclear
energy
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, in
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1980, it was the the third biggest
energy
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 source in France, at 50
terawatts
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 per
hour
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.
Then
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, the figure experienced a dramatic increase during the next 20 years to reach a peak of around 460
terawatts
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 per
hour
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. Considering the hydroelectric
energy
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, the value fluctuated until 2005 and levelled off at 50
terawatts
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 per
hour
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. The thermal
energy
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 was the primary source of
energy
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 in 1980.
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, the value experienced a decrease of 75 terrawats per
hour
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 and remained constant, at 50 terrawats per
hour
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. The production of renewable
energy
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 started only in 2010, and it generated the least amount of
energy
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, which was just below
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50
terawatts
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 per
hour
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, terawatts, hour with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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