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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe that actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

#activity #impact #plants #animals #world #people #actions #change
Nowadays, we observe the numerous unsustainable acts being performed by humans
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 led to vital damage
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 not only our environment but
also
 to animals
as well as
 plants.
While
 some people think
this
 is irreversible,
whereas
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some believe
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 still not too late and
this
 problem can be solved. In
this
 essay, I will explain both
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 views and will give my opinion on how we can reduce these negative impacts.
To begin
 with, we know climate change is extremely harmful and the reason behind it is none other than the unethical acts being taken by humans
such
 as
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 toxic gases from cars, factories, waste burning etc. In order to overcome
this
 damage, we can take several steps i.e., motivate people to avoid using cars and prefer bicycles or walking. In
this
 way, we can not finish it all but can reduce it
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large
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 extent.
For instance
, in
Japan
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 the new project initiated by
government
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the government
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 has really proved helpful. The government has installed
bicycles
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 stands on each street and people can use it for free and
this
 way they have
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drastic
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 decrease in car usage and their climate change has
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.
Furthermore
, we all should plant as
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 plants as we can.
This
 will fight the environment
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will help in overcoming
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CO2 and
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spread more clean and fresh air in the atmosphere
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with the help of
this
 we can increase the life expectancy of animals, that will be extinct very soon.
For example
, the Prime Minister of Pakistan initiated a project called 1
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 Tsunami of
plants
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.
As a result
, a lot of greenery is back and
animals
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 breeding has gotten
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 positive impact.
Although
, we cannot close down all manufacturing industries for greenery.
Nevertheless
, we can at least take
such
 steps that overcome the risks of hazards and give us a beautiful and fresh day and night in
this
 world and we do not feel suffocate and depressed living in
this
 world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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