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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Space
 exploration offers us the chance to learn a great deal of new things.
However
, as it costs lots of money, we need to decide the best way to spend our
resources
. I would argue that there are more pressing
problems
 that need addressing but that there may be other ways for us to continue
space
 exploration. There are a number of
problems
 which they are still affecting the world today. Despite incredible advancements in science and ,technology there are still billions of people who struggle with health, education, food and water, shelter and security. Many people suggest that we do have the
resources
 to resolve these
problems
 and
therefore
 should not waste billions of dollars for exploring
space
.
On the other hand
, we can learn a lot with the exploration of
space
. There is the possibility of discovering new materials and energy sources. Some scientists even suggest that we may be able to live on other planets or make contact with other life forms. Because the universe is so big, it does not make sense to only look at our planet. One possibility of continuing to explore the universe
while
 improving the quality of life on Earth is through greater cooperation between countries.
For example
, a global
space
 agency could be started which
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allows countries to share their
resources
.
This
 would enable countries to allocate money more effectively. In ,conclusion
although
 it seems a bad idea to spend money to explore
space
instead
 of to resolve global
problems
, it would not be the best to stop exploring
space
. One solution would be to better share our
resources
 in order to help everybody
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  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
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  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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