Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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There is no denying the fact that one of the critical things in our
life
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is health, and we should be concerned about it.
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it is a commonly held belief that finding other options like medicines and treatment for
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issue
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is better than
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their doctor, there is
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an argument that opposes it. I consider that
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trend, and we must have the awareness of visiting
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.
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with, a number of issues are dangerous and hard to deal with by ourselves.
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, it may appear not a serious problem at first
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the
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get worse and worse.
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, experts can give you the easiest or the best treatment for your situation.
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, the
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time I got a headache, I tried to drink tea, I thought it
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make
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different
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on the contrary
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the pain got
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, I went to my doctor, and he gave me a pill. Another point to consider,
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the
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doctors
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have knowledge more than anyone, they have studied medicine for six years. It is
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possible to say that no one has the ability to know the issue and cure it except the
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, they have seen various illnesses and dealt with them.
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, deadly diseases or viruses
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Ebola and COVID-19. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that we ought to go to our
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for anything
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concern
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ours
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health, there are several health problems
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be serious
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and can
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cause death.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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