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The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.

The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.
The given table illustrates
the
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information about the consumption of
water
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 for domestic, industrial and agricultural sectors in six countries in the year 2003.
Overall
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, the highest
usage
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 is shown in the agricultural field in all the countries,
while
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 the least amount of
water
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 is used for industries.
However
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, approximately the same
usage
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 can be seen in the
UK
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 and
China
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.
According to
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 the table, all countries have given priority to the agricultural field compared with other sectors.
However
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, Canada is the lowest contributor to the agricultural sector as it shows only 5% of the
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 of
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.
Furthermore
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, the
UK
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 has the largest (90%) consumption of
water
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 for the agricultural sector. When it comes to industrial
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, Canada supplied 32% of
water
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,
while
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 Australia contributed only 2%. As is seen in the table, the
UK
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 and
China
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 reveal the same pattern that
usage
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 of
water
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 for domestic consumption is 5% and 6% respectively.
As well as
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 for industrial
usage
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 the
UK
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 was 5 % and
China
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 was 7%.
Moreover
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, the
usage
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 of the agricultural sector in the
UK
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 and
China
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 was 90% and 87% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, uk, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • domestic usage
  • industrial usage
  • agricultural usage
  • cubic meters
  • per capita
  • water-intensive industries
  • sustainable water management
  • irrigation practices
  • efficient water use
  • developed vs developing nations
  • water scarcity
  • desalination
  • water footprint
  • resource allocation
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